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Old 17-10-2009, 03:40 PM
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need a favour!

Is there anyone willing to read the first paragraph of my Oscar Wilde essay? i need as much feed back on it as i can, And i you can be as harsh as you like! If someone wants to do me the massively huge favour then i will PM it to you...
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Old 17-10-2009, 03:48 PM
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I could give it a whirl i suppose but i'm only doing higher english and you're doing advanced right? But i guess it wouldn't hurt to have a wee look
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Old 17-10-2009, 03:50 PM
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Yeah advanced allthough i don't thinks its going to get an AdvH grade D:

haha well i sent it now! no getting out of it


anymore people would be great
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I can look at it... I know I'm not in 6th form, but still :-)
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Old 17-10-2009, 04:16 PM
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I can look at it... I know I'm not in 6th form, but still :-)
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Old 17-10-2009, 04:19 PM
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OK just read it.

It sounds really good and see no major problems with it. But i realised during reading that i'm not sure what it's supposed to be like and what's supposed to be in it. Like a marking scheme or something. I can't even remember the proper word for it haha
Erm... I'm trying to think about it but i dunno the type of things you need in it like 'R.E.A.D' or 'P.Q.A.E' or anything stupid like that?
Otherwise i have no other reference to an advanced higher essay but comparing it to my own essays i'd say yours is luckily much better lol

Sorry i'm totally no help lol I thought maybe i'd have something constructive to say but turns out i don't. As always haha.
I spose i'm not the person to ask for help like this My bad x
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Old 17-10-2009, 04:28 PM
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haha oh yeah! the marking schemes are the same really but a A at higher is a C at Adv.

so you have to go into so much more detail, which i dont think i have done enough of!
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Old 17-10-2009, 04:40 PM
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I'll give it a read. Not that I know *anything* about Oscar Wilde.
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Old 17-10-2009, 06:52 PM
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It might be easier to post bits of it here! then you have to reasd it mwahahaha!

element 2 - triviality , point 1

In all three of the plays Wilde’s characters are shallow and superficial; they are over exaggerated in their traits. Wilde, of course uses this to his advantage he uses this to reflect the society at the time. Again he is not pointing out it is a bad thing just showing that it is in society.

Wilde’s technique of switching the trivial with the serious clearly outlines and critiques the Victorian society: In ‘The Importance of Being Earnest’ Algernon makes a big deal about the cucumber sandwiches and Lady Bracknell takes great care in choosing the music as she says

“French songs I cannot possibly allow. People always seem to think that they are improper, and either look shocked, which is vulgar, or laugh, which is worse”

This critiques the shallowness of the upper class. The most trivial things are what placed them high up in the social hierarchy. There is a strict set of rules that must be followed and Wilde’s exaggeration on the music and cucumber sandwiches critiques the society by mocking them. By looking at the Society and seeing its behaviour we realise the upper class is some what over-civilized. The moral sense of the characters has been overturned – the trivial is serious, and the serious trivial.
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Old 17-10-2009, 06:54 PM
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I closed my eyes after "you'll have to read it"
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HA! My advice would be shit anyway, just about my dislike of hyphens :-p
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Holding on to anger is like grasping a hot coal with the intent of throwing it at someone else; you are the one who gets burned. Buddha.
That was non-non-non-non-NON-Heinous! ~Bill and Ted~ Bodacious dudes.
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Old 17-10-2009, 06:59 PM
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lol lots of colons in this part!...maybe too many actually :|
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lol lots of colons in this part!...maybe too many actually :|
You tricked me into reading that, didn't you?? There was only one, and a semi colon.

Anyway, I hope you've change the bit in the first para. I noticed in that one that it said 'The Importance of being Earnest' whereas in the other one it said The 'Importance of being Earnest'
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Holding on to anger is like grasping a hot coal with the intent of throwing it at someone else; you are the one who gets burned. Buddha.
That was non-non-non-non-NON-Heinous! ~Bill and Ted~ Bodacious dudes.
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Old 17-10-2009, 07:59 PM
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lol lots of colons in this part!...maybe too many actually :|
Hehehe you said colon!

How bad is that? I find it funny! Lol x
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